I'm doing Deana's Gearin' Up To Get An Agent Blog-o-Rama this week which involves getting helpful feedback on my MANHOLE query letter. Feel free to weigh in on what works and doesn't work for you. (You may not tell me that my manuscript is too short. It is a conscious choice on my part.)
OKAY, BECAUSE I HAVE GOTTEN SUCH AWESOME FEEDBACK, I AM REVISING AND PUTTING THE NEW VERSION IN. PLEASE FEEL FREE TO THROW YOUR TWO CENTS IN.
Eighteen-year old Ben Honorat decides not to go to the party with his girlfriend, Ani. He’s not there when two strangers pour her drinks and brag about the upcoming “ride.” He misses her table dance, her announcement of a plan to hook up with half the guys in the room, and finding her passed out three hours later with no memory of the night.
But when doctors surgically remove a lighter left inside Ani, he's there. When whispers of "Firecrotch" and "Manhole" follow Ani down the school halls, he's there. When Ani begs him to make her forget, but then cries as he whispers, "I love you," he's there. And when his best friend tells him Ani's messing around with other guys, he is there.
Ben doesn't know how to fix Ani. But he is there.
MANHOLE is a dark contemporary upper YA novel addressing the devastating aftereffects of rape from the perspective of the victim’s boyfriend. Sparsely written in the manner of Beth Goobie's STICKS AND STONES or Chris Lynch's FREEWILL, MANHOLE is complete at 30,000 words.
I have eight years experience volunteering as a rape victim advocate in hospital ERs. I was a quarter finalist in the 2011 Amazon Breakthrough Novel Awards. I have spent the last six months working as an editorial intern for Entangled Publishing and have recently been hired as a publicist for their YA authors.